Year 5. Fantasy Stories.

Date: 24th Nov 2017 @ 1:05pm

Year 5 have begun to look at Fantasy Stories as we have had some very strange deliveries to our classroom. We have read the start of the book cloudland and watched the videos that were delivered in the parcel. Your task is to write a description of a character arriving at a Fantasy World- try to use the grammar targets that we have used in class.

Reds

Me

Our Steps to Success

My teacher

 

Noun starter, Noun starter, feeling starter, short sentences for effect

 

 

 

Colon for expansion

 

 

 

Correctly punctuated direct speech to move the story on

 

 

 

Embedded relative clause

 

 

 

Brackets, commas and dashes to indicate parenthesis

 

 

 

Complex sentences

 

 

 

Fronted adverbials

 

 

 

Modal verbs (should, would, could) and adverbs to indicate possibility (possibly definitely)

 

 

 

Hyphenated Compound Adjectives

 

 

Strength

 

 

Strength

Target

Target

 
Blues
 

Me

Our Steps to Success

My teacher

 

Noun starter

 

 

 

Similie starter

 

 

 

Correctly punctuated direct speech to move the story on

 

 

 

Embedded relative clause

 

 

 

Brackets, commas and dashes to indicate parenthesis

 

 

 

Complex sentences

 

 

 

Fronted adverbials

 

 

Strength

 

 

Strength

Target

Target

 

Yellows

Me

Our Steps to Success

My teacher

 

Noun starter

 

 

 

Similie starter

 

 

 

Direct speech

 

 

 

Embedded relative clause

 

 

 

Brackets and commas to indicate parenthesis

 

 

 

Complex sentences

 

 

Strength

 

 

Strength

Target

Target

 

 

 

 

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Freya S wrote:

Like a curious cat the the girl explored through the jungle. A giraffe ,who had the neck the size of a half mountain, strides towards her .As she tip toed through a bear legs she breathed in the wind in her hair .She whispered in the her mind as she carried on walking throw wood,
" I love exploreing .This is a great expiriense!"
as she mumbubeld on. She saw a great big tree it had a lightly market face on it along with a curly, wurly beard.

Joseph L wrote:

The unrelenting rise of the clouds comfortably cushioned Albert's cliff-edge accident. Fluff trickled off his face - which was becoming bigger- to the cloud children saw his fall. As light as a feather, Albert felt himself beginning to weigh nothing. "We will make you a bed of clouds," whispered the children (who caught Albert) hoarsely. The clouds were see through; he stuck his arm through the transparent fluff feeling himself walking across a timber boat. Inside the boat, Albert began to grow a moustache, beard, grey hair and wear adventurer's clothes. How would I possibly find my parents now? Albert muttered. "Come no closer," boomed a voice. The voice was hair-raising: the shriek made his very long beard circulate his neck. Throat-dry, which was like sawdust, covered his ears. Terrifying thoughts whirled round in his head. "Ouch." Since Albert was having a nightmare about his parents, he couldn't get to sleep. Joseph L

Victoria Clayton wrote:

Lucy Clayton Year 5

The unusual cliff pushed me thirty feet down ,whilst my hart was racing my bones were breaking and my curiosity was low on wether I was going to survive or not.Suddenly,.......................a destructive thud came to me and that was that I landed in a gargantuan, Christmasy cloud.I met a friendly dolphin ,who was upset because a temperamental figure is destroying her city.

John-Joseph S wrote:

Once I landed on this newly discovered world I decided to take a walk outside the space ship. As I scuttled like a crab across the crunching leaves that lay on the ground, I came to a stop and noticed that all the tree in this strange world had no leaves apart from one tree in the distance. I made my way over the leaf covered ground to take a closer look. The tree, which had extra large black leaves, howled in the breeze. As quick as flash, a voice boomed from within the tree, “who goes there?!”. I froze in fear looking for who the voice could belong to when all of a sudden the tree began to move. I realised it was time to get away from this place. So I ran back to my space ship and blasted back into the safety of the stars of space.

Abigail R wrote:

As she took another step into the shadowy mist, her silky, hazel hair swayed from side to side in the light breeze. The human being's foggy eyes, which melted with wonder, widened. Like a ferocious tiger hunting for it's prey, Holly stalked along the twilight river bank. Her rosebud lips creaked open to reach out for much needed oxygen. Stones tore at Holly's laced sneakers as she questioned to herself, "What is this foggy place? Where am I?"
The now puzzled girl buried her head in her hands and started bawling in confusion. Should I carry on walking ? All these thoughts were buzzing in her private mind. On the outside, her usual jolly spirits were replaced with deep and mournful thoughts about the future. In the depths of Holly's heart, however, one hundred percent pure resilience bloomed. But this resilience - who tried to speak up - was not noticed. Why ? Because Holly's obnoxious thoughts was the centre of attention. Shifting her tears to the side, Holly jumped up and said, "Life is about exploring not locking yourself up!"
With pride, she strode on, her baggy, denim jacket flapping as she went. Holly's black jeans swished : wind traveled through parts that the over grown branches had torn away. Ruby-red blood dripped of her eyebrows. Did she give up? Not this time! Only when she reached the edge of the cliff she was on to admire the cocktail-orange sunrise, the start of a fresh day...

Abigail Reid

Olivia-Martine Calderbank wrote:

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Valerie O wrote:

As Lilly walked into the dry island, sand ran through her toes. Palm trees towered over her - that made Lilly have a strong feeling - mesmerised . Anxiously, Lilly looked at a singing mermaid!!! She had thousands of hyperactive ideas to meet the mermaid, but she did not no what to say. Can I Should I how can I possibly talk to a mermaid without entering my past ...? Like a person who lost a race ,which was important to them, Lilly sighed , her heart sank , smile dropped and soul brock. Forgetting about the heart breaking past, she took a deep breath and marched towards the bored mermaid. SNAP!!!!!!!!!!! Twigs were snapped in two. The surprized mermaid shrieked nervously," Sorry Daddy I was not speaking to humans I was singing in a quiet place not like the palace!" . Instantly , the mermaid leaped into the sapphire-blue ocean. All left behind was a violet flower from her hair. Lilly mournfully held the flower and watched the orange sun set while the frosty wind blew through her bland hair.

Joe H wrote:

Lights shined into the boys eyes while his concionce told him to come in. Like a bunny, the boy leaped into the illuminated light.
"AHHHHHHH" Mathew bellowed. Mathew (who was a young boy who wanted to play with his dinasours) is falling down a dark alley. While he was falling, a man appeared Mathew could not see his face seen as it was all black. The dark silhouette started to speak"Hi, you are being taken to back to the past were you will witness all happy and sad events. You will start when ww1 broke out." As I got to the bottom of the tube, I saw Archduke Franz Ferdinand and his wife in a car. Like the Christmas carol, I couldn't warn him that he was about to get assassinated. Where the gaps of houses break of I could see a gang of people. Because of Mathews research he thought it was the black hand gang. He felt very left out he had never been to Bosnia and he was the only English person there. The man Gavrillo Princip pointed the gun.

Isabelle H wrote:

As a young girl named Lilly stumbled of a mountain edge her heart pounded, pulse raised and body froze. Luckily a plucked up cloud supported her and gave her a soft landing. As she lifted her head up to her astonishment she saw giant cloud worms whizz around - reminding her of the Smiler ride she had once seen-. She saw a creature she thought maybe was called a unicat which was half unicorn half cat. The unicorns who looked weird, rubbed their heads against her knee as thought asking for some spot light. Cloud burgers were chewing on each other causing the cloudy layer of mayo to dribble off them. However on the other corner were other 1000 mini houses. Still counting she cried,''where am I''. Some children were passing by and took pity on the young girl who was in a heap on the floor and made her a bunk cloud. Like the people down below on the floor, she snuggled up in the puffy bed and thought were she might be in the future. The sun, which was getting rubbed out, still left a trial of iridescent sparkles.

Valerie Orok wrote:

Very imaginational Isabelle sounds like you used all your brain.

Freya S wrote:

The long breathtaking fall, on to the cloud ,meant that the children of cloud land started a big wild tordnado ,which caused them to catch the boy safely and bring him down. when the young boy turnd to an old man the man was still looking for his parents by then who knows they could of forgot about him or lost or past away albert was super disoponted.

Freya S wrote:

The long breathtaking fall, on to the cloud ,meant that the children of cloud land started a big wild tordnado ,which caused them to catch the boy safely and bring him down. when the young boy turnd to an old man the man was still looking for his parents by then who knows they could of forgot about him or lost or past away albert was super disoponted.

James E wrote:

Rainbow colours covered the isolated little boy’s eyesbefore you could even imagine from his great fall.Albert,who had bring him self back up from his magnificent fall,felt lonely without his parents.Suddenly Albert heard a terrifying voice coming closer and closer to him.Getting brighter and brighter jaguar’s and leopards were coming towords him.Albert frightingly said”Please don’t eat me I’m stuck on this cloud.But the Jaguar didn’t reply.The humongous breeze nearly knocked of Albert.Horryfingly Albert heard different noises like marbles of spit coming down from an apple tree from the cloud.Also he saw strange looking space ships with Aliens dangling over the space ship.Desprate to see the Jaguar couldn’t see any prey furiously so he decided to try and chomp up Albert into little tiny pieces of rock.as he was about to chomp up Albert his dad and mum were right in his head.But strangely the Alien jumped of from the space ship and knocked of the jaguar off the cloud.Albert couldn’t believe it Albert exclaimed “Wow you saved me hide the jaguar will come and find you.”

Grace H wrote:

As quiet as a mouse, the unstable girl trembled forward. She could see a tree which had the biggest trunk that you had ever seen, so big it was impossible to see around it. Her mouth began to dry up-sawdust began to stick to her dry lips and then into her mouth. When she walked forward, a low pitched voice shouted out to her "don't go any further, they will spread rumours about you". The voice was full of doom. The girl continued to walk on with anticipation and ignored the voice of doom. She began to feel grass slowly wriggling in between her cold toes

Marcus H wrote:

Fred the pirate lies in cloud and on the a flying boat suddenly 50 giant turtles invaded

Marcus H wrote:

Fred the pirate lives in cloudland on a flying boat with his goat that was wearing a coat made out of oats which got invaded by 50 giant turtles which began to eat the boat. The goat began to get worried so the goat asked one of the giant turtles "if you could eating our boat, we will invite you to a party with lots of oats". The turtle agreed. Fred and the goat went to set up the party whilst the turtle went to tell the others. Later that day the turtles arrived at the party, they ate all the oats and got do tubby that they exploded

Olivia-Martine C wrote:

As Albert walked through the mysterious,brightly coloured cave he saw the emmbedded dimonds sparkling and shining light on his pathway. Whilst he crept through the cave he could hear footsteps getting louder and louder. Suddenly the biggest white horse appeared before him. Albert gasped,"Who are you?"
"Why have you never seen a funny looking unicorn before? With 5 legs, 2 horns and 3 ears!" The unicorn Cried. Albert shuffled a little closer and could clearly see the funny looking horse in front of him was in fact a real life funny looking unicorn.

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